Sunday, May 11, 2008 - 23:00
::Gimme Your Body, Not Your Luv::
MELA'S POV
They call me Mela, but my name is Jamela Amyr. Only 14 years old, and i've lived the life of a 25 year old married mother of 4. Average "A, B, C" student, with an out of control home life. My father is raising me, for my mother lives in New Orleans and i'm waaay in this stupid ass, lame ass, wack ass, Tappahannock, Virginia. I am a single child, with only one friend here so far. Her name is Lariss, 16 years old, but with the mind of a 5 yr. old. I also have a boyfriend, you could say, and he buys my love, basically. His name is Shane and he--my dad's calling me...
"I'm comin' dad," I yelled as I lifted my body out of my chair after checking my Myspace.
Walking down the cherry wood stairs, I could sense a change about to occur. My dad stood at the bottom step, with his arms folded, and his jaws clinched tightly together.
"Yes, daddy"?
"Mela, are you a virgin still"?
"YES...i mean, yes, why? I questioned, becoming extremely defensive
"...The principal called me a few minutes ago..."
"Ok"???
"...There was something on the boys restroom wall...Jamela Amyr gives great..." My dad stopped, not wanting to say anymore.
"WHAAAAAAAT, i'm still a damn virgin for god sake"! I was pissed off by this time
"So, what is that all about? There are hundreds of other girls, but why you Jamela"?
"I dunno dad, i'm asking myself the same question."
"Stay outta trouble Mela."
"Can i go back to my room now"?
My dad gave me the okay to exit his prescense(sp). Tears formed in my eyes a little as I thought about a way to shrink my developing body. "Kill yourself," I thought aloud as I plopped onto my purple, flowery comforters on my bed. Looking out of my window, I began to count the clouds in the sunny day, casting before me. My eyes wandered from side to side, until, just then, it came to a complete stop. I spotted HIM, yes HIM, pulling up his baggy basketball shorts, as he bobbed his head from side to side, listening to his Ipod. It was Chris...my next door neighbor, my enemy...the person who had indeed, taken away my virginity...but, by force. He was 17, popular, could have any piece of p*ssy he desired. I HATED him, he HATED me, but I needed him...And I didn't have the slightest clue as to why. Chris tortured me, horribly, ever since I moved here 3 years ago. It was always him and his 14 yr. old brother, Mijo, making my life a living nightmare. That's it, Mijo put that s*** in the boys' bathroom! Neither of them have ever given me a clear explanation as to why they tortured me, it was always, "Because I can, now shut the f*** up and give me what I want..."
SHOULD I RUN IT? THE DRAMAZZZZZ COMING!
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this story was bangin i was on edge all while readin it yo
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midnight obsession[starrin chris]running
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Run it.
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*~2 Sexi 4 U~*
awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww, its over already, well I would have to say this story was really good I enjoyed it!
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Chris M. Brown U are tha s*** man i love ur music ur voice ur personailty oh and ur SEXINESS!!! believe dat u kno u FINE!!!!
awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww, its over already, well I would have to say this story was really good I enjoyed it!
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Chris M. Brown U are tha s*** man i love ur music ur voice ur personailty oh and ur SEXINESS!!! believe dat u kno u FINE!!!!
The End!!
Left me on the edge of my seat...BRAVO BRAVO
your good ma
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R-E-S-P-E-C-T me....always..Your talking to a Diva
BRAVA BRAVA!!!
ENCORE ENCORE!!!
THAT STORY WAS HOT. LEFT ME ON THE EDGE OF MY SEAT.
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"Lovers & Friends" http://www.chrisbrownworld.com/forum/hot-new-story-friend-new-writer-cas... I need ah cast
"Why You Leavin?" http://www.chrisbrownworld.com/forum/why-you-leavin-based-song-why-you-l...
thats good 4 chris but not so good for jamela GOOD STORY I LOVED IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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u can hate if u want to but ur wastin ur time
NIECY...IF I DO A PT. 2, I WANT U 2 SHOOT ME LOL!!
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*Felecia The FAiiRY*
Chris is my BESTFRIEND...
DAMN!!!!!!!!!!!
that was a good story but i think chris loved her kinda but after his dad died he didn't want 2 get attached 2 anyone else so he wouldn't feel that pain ever again so 2 treated jamela bad cuz he thought that way he wouldn't develop any feelings for her,,, that was freakin sad though :( atleast now she doesn't have 2 deal with wat chris put her through anymore :(
So sad Jamela's dead....but Chris
got wat he deserved....GREAT STORY!!!
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*Forever*
this was good as hell pART2 PART2!
make her ghost come and beat his azz
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-Hey?,where`s the cream fillin?
*Licks rihanna`s forhead*
-Ahh! thats the stuff.
Hostess ♥
this was really qood.. sick bastard he should of been the one to die.. but jamela was f***ING DUMB ass hell.. but then aqain she was only 14... stupid younq qirl..
ii crieddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddd
BUT YEAH DID CHRIS REALLLY LOVE HER? HE WAS JUST TO BI-POLAR TO SHOW IT?
OMGSH I CNT BELIEVE U ENDED DIS STORY WITOUT MY CONSENT. WHO DO U THINK U R?? PRAY 4 BONITA ELLA ES MUY SICK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
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We r not da same i am a martian
its yung cydney renee baby no abortion
i got force ems and i dnt have 2 force em
they jus do wat i say jack, like wheel or fortune
I'm heartless and iced out ya see
i've got this ice box where my heart used 2 b
Ya mon
That's what his b****ass get....
Im still sad tho...
but yea...GREAT STORY!!!! *standing ovation*
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DAMNNNNNNNNNNNNN LOL.. GREAT ENDING THAT SON OF b**** DESERVED WHAT HE GOT.-sad- And I can`t feel sorry for him cause he deserved it.
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Trey:Baby,you like my hair?
Breana:(slaps the b**** out of Trey)
Trey:I thought it was cute.
Breana:You look like a sexy horse.
MMMMM..Horse-Licious..I Love You Trey =D
Awww...thats what Chris get! Psycho b****! But i loved this story u get an ENCORE!
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*~2 Sexi 4 U~*
WONDERFUL!!
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and I love Bilal Ali!{LOL real life boyfriend]
word i didn't think he was really gonna shoot her. wow crazy ending. interesting story though
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Summer '08
i do what they can't do, i just do me =]
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AFTERMATH--6 MONTHS LATER
Mr. Amyr--He moved back to New Orleans with Jamela's mom [Deana]. After his car accident [refer to the last chapter], he recovered rather quickly. He couldn't bare to live in VA without his daughter by his side. His connections with Ms. Joyce were cut shortly after Jamela's funeral.
Mijo--He's still living at home in VA with Ms. Joyce. School has been pretty tough for him, considering that everyone and their mama know about his big brother being a murderer.
Lariss--She's out of jail along with her brothers. She did infact attend Jamela's funeral. Her and her brothers were later charged with vandelism of Chris' house and were later ordered to serve 4 years of probation and 2,685 hours of community service.
Lucky--He was also arrested for posession of marijuana found in his house.
Jamela--Her funeral was held a week later after her death. The medics could not revive her. The bullet was discovered to have gone through her back, piercing her heart by an inch. Her death was broadcasted nationwide, being that the killer and victim were so young and supposedly in love. Her body now rest in her hometown of New Orleans, Louisiana.
CHRIS*-He was sentenced to 65 years in prison, without a possibility of parole. He was charged with 1st degree murder and 4 counts of battery and assault. He still has a few friends, including his little brother Mijo who has backed him to the end. He takes daily pills for bi-polar disorder that was diagnosed when he first went to prison. He mainly lives in solitary confinement, due to immates sexually assaulting him and various fights. His home will from now on be in the VA State Prison until he's in his 80's...=)
[[THANK YOUUUUUUUUU EVERYBODY!! I HOPE YOU ENJOYED]]
dam dat was good.. Im in tears but they stopped when i realized how dumb she was in the first place.
AWESOME STORY!!
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<Melanie<<
OMG!!NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO...
IT'S LIKE ROMEO AND JULIET...NOOOO
IT'S NOT!!!LOL...
THIS IS...BAD!! I..I...I...CAN'T SLEEP...
IDK WHAT TO DO WITH MYSELF...
NOOOOO.
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CHECK OUT .:.In Cahootz.:.
and I love Bilal Ali!{LOL real life boyfriend]
AWWW THANX GOOEYCAKE, THAT WAS REALLY SWEET!! I'M SORRY IT HAD 2 END LIKE THAT YOU GUYS...=( I'M KINDA SAD 2
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*Felecia The FAiiRY*
Chris is my BESTFRIEND...
WAT!!! he shuld have just shot himself. now he's gonna have federal charges for rape cuz he fled the state and raped her outta state that means for sure he's going to federal prison w/o even counting the sentence for first degree murder. ugh and add da to 2gether he might have like 50 to life w/o parole. he's screwed wat an as5hole. (lol me and my lawyer wanna b as5) wat did he mean sorry!?!?
yes plz updates us.
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check out my stories
"Lovers & Friends" http://www.chrisbrownworld.com/forum/hot-new-story-friend-new-writer-cas... I need ah cast
"Why You Leavin?" http://www.chrisbrownworld.com/forum/why-you-leavin-based-song-why-you-l...
OMG!!! that bastard...killed her...
YES!!! we want you to update everybody...
im still in shock..
RUN IT!!!
Dam OMG WTF this story is crazy u cant leave us hangin RUN IT!!!
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u can hate if u want to but ur wastin ur time
AHHHH..no she couldnt have died! Yes! Update us. Run it!
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*~2 Sexi 4 U~*
Okay,I`m sorry I haven`t been reading this and not running it,I`ma busy person..and I honestly think you should have got an award at The ChrisBrownFictionAwards cause I love this story with all my heart and I`m not just saying that,I`M SERIOUS! and I been silent reading lol,but I won`t do that no more,I was once a commenter.but I don`t know what happen,but anyways I almost shedded a tear when Jamela died,like for real I`m on the verge of tears,it`s like I knew her or somethin,Chris is so crazy like for real,I can`t believe she`s dead! like Omg,....I`m tryna stop the tears from fallin...I`m just so sad lol and PLEASE update about what`s going on,you are a GREAT author,I`m one of your fans,I just been silent about it.I love all of your stories.I will comment Call Me Daddy cause that`s my s***..Sorry for the poppin up,but I just had to let you know.
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Trey:Baby,you like my hair?
Breana:(slaps the b**** out of Trey)
Trey:I thought it was cute.
Breana:You look like a sexy horse.
MMMMM..Horse-Licious..I Love You Trey =D
awwww...write more of it please...Run it!
ARE YOU SERIOUS ITS OVER....DAMN DAMN DAMN CHRIS YOUR YOUR IDK KNOW WHAT TO SAY...THIS WAS GOOD
yeah tell us what happened with everyone.....wow Chris is a f***ing dumb ass...damn I cant believe she's dead..Girl you are a good writer I would have never guessed that....I almost shedded a tear like real talk...but Im a thug so I dont cry but that was real heartfelt...I going to nominate you for a award taht was hecka good
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R-E-S-P-E-C-T me....always..Your talking to a Diva
omg his crazy ass shot her and then said he loved her i can't believe that s*** he needs to suffer i hope they rape his ass in jail with his dumbass i cant believe she died. she didn't deserve to die like that i think am gonna cry.
OH MY f***ING GOSH!!
That was soooooooo crazy!
you HAVE to run it.
I wanna know what happens to everybody.
RUN IT!
{New Reader, (Well, New Poster)}
Don't Tell Me It's Over!
No! No! No!
It Can't End Lyk That!
That s*** Is f***ed Up!
To Be Honest, I Thought He Was Gonna Shoot Himself...
Bi-Polar Ass!
You Have To Write More, A Sequal Or Something Please!!!
-90z Baybee
OH HELL NAH U CANT END IT LIKE THAT MAN THAT s*** f***ED UP HOW HE GONE SHOOT HER THEN SAY HE SORRY OLD PHYSCO SON OF A b****
AND YES I WANT SOME DANG UPDATES K??
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"~take a trip to my universe and see things my way~"
check out my stories
midnight obsession[starrin chris]running
the other me[starrin me]running
addicted[sarrin u] finished
in the middle-just started
greed envy and hate -[my new room mate]soon
Well damn!!!!
It can't end like that!?!?!?
That's f***ed up!!!!
That crazy ass son of a b****!!!
He needs to get his f***in' ass choke and then shot a few times!!
RUN IT!
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Money on my mind, money is my habit
Stay on the grind, until money's automatic
b**** I love money, I'ma f***in fanatic
Weezy-Brand New
CONTINUED--MR. AMYR'S POV
"...Yes, yes, she's in Cali."
"Sir, how old is she"??
"14."
"And who is she with"??
"Her boyfriend."
"...And his name is"??
"LOOK MISS, MY f***IN DAUGHTER IS IN TROUBLE!! I NEED YOU TO SEND HELP. I DON'T HAVE TIME FOR QUESTIONAIRES"!!
"Please calm down sir, i'm contacting the California State police at the moment."
I paced my bedroom floor, looking for my car keys. Quickly snatching them off of the dresser, I jogged down to my car in nothing but pajama pants...
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CHRIS POV
I watched Jamela suddenly drop to the ground, gasping for a breath of air as she did so. Lucky remained in the same spot, still asleep from intoxication. Placing the gun on the counter, I slowly strolled over to where Mela was. The hallway was dark, I could hear the girls in their rooms crying from fear. They didn't dare to come out...
Mela laid on her stomach in a pool of blood with her neck twisted to the side. Whimpers escaped her blood-filled mouth as her bullet wound to her back was clearly visible. Her body jumped and twitched a bit. I kneeled down next to her, caressing her hair. Excess blood gushed out of her back, pouring onto the floor. I sat down next to her on the floor and placed her head onto my lap. Blood and mucus was being smeared all over me as she coughed. Tears ran down her face, staining my pants. I rocked her back and forth, hearing her softly cry..
"Baby, I love you."
"Ch--Ch--Chri--Chris....wh--why"??
"I'm sorry,"
"Ch--"
"I'M SORRY, I'M SORRY, I'M SOR---"
Sirens were heard blaring outside of the house. THE GIRLS! ONE OF THEM HAD CALLED THE f***IN POLICE!! It was all over now. What more could I do? Jamela's whimpers became louder. She cried out in agony...THEN THAT'S WHEN EVERYTHING STOPPED.
"Jamela," I cried out, hearing the front door being busted open
-COUGH-
"Jamela please wake up baby."
"PUT YOUR HANDS UP NOOOOOOW"!!
An officer had his gun pointed at me. He stood sternly, reverting his eyes back and forth between me and Jamela. I ignored the officer, placing my hand over her heart. The officer's commands became a big blur. My whole body shook violently, not feeling what I wanted to feel...a heartbeat...
"JAMELA"!! I shook her a bit
Tears ran down my flushed cheeks. I shook her a bit more...
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MR. AMYR'S POV
"Mr. Amyr"?? The ladies voice echoed in my ear as I was driving at 80 mph down the highway
"YES"?!?
"We...um...---"
"PLEASE, PLEASE TELL ME THAT MY BABY'S OK."
"Sir, are you in a stable place at the moment"??
"MAM, PLEEEEASE TELL M----"
"Sir, i'm sorry, but she was reportedly shot and killed before-----"
I dropped the phone, my mind going blank...SHE DIED!!! Everything felt empty. My hands froze. My eyes were fogged. My legs, paralyzed. My car took control of itself as I veered off of the road. My hands couldn't react to what was happening...MY ONLY CHILD WAS DEAD, is what I repeated over and over again, until
BAAAAAAM
+THE END+
Do you guys want me 2 update you all on everybody??
RUN IT
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"~take a trip to my universe and see things my way~"
check out my stories
midnight obsession[starrin chris]running
the other me[starrin me]running
addicted[sarrin u] finished
in the middle-just started
greed envy and hate -[my new room mate]soon
give us more please!!!
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R-E-S-P-E-C-T me....always..Your talking to a Diva
600th comment! Yay!
RUN IT
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You need to get like me
Stunting is a habit
Just gotta have it
-Chris Brown, Get Like Me
yoooooooooooooo....
i aint expect all this..
damn,
he is kinda psycho
i love you [blows kiss] then bam ?!?!?!? wdf
mad man i tell you
i hope she make it,
dumb phuck of a chris he belong in the mad house
shiit.
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i want yo lovey dovey
yo kiss kiss
in yo mind you fantasize about
gettin wit me
yo its that trinigyul yuh kno