Monday, August 4, 2008 - 19:44
::Scream My Name::
NEW YORK
I sat in the seat with my head propped against the window. My heart was filled with hatred and no one could take that away. With every bump and jolt of the bus, I became angrier! Everything was happening at once, too much for a 17 year old to handle. Why me? I questioned no one in particular. My sister, Chantal, sat beside me, talking a hole in my head, but I didn't feel like hearing it! She was the main reason why I was on this bus. Fighting over this dumb ass boy who used her 15 year old ass for sex...And of course, I jumped in, defending her...
"Asia, are you gonna talk to me"?
"No, not really," I spat, glaring out the window
"I'm your damn sister"!!
"...And your point is"??
"Look Asia, i'm sorry okay, i've told you this since the day the judge ordered that we go to this damn place."
"Whatever Channy."
I closed my eyes and sighed, hoping she would shut the hell up before I blew a fuse. Within the next few minutes, chaos erupted on the bus and me eyes flew open. "We're here," my sister informed, giving me 'puppy dog' eyes. My eyes reverted back to the window, seeing 6 men dressed in camoflauge army atire. I laughed, shaking my damn head at how seriously some people took their job...
"GIRLS AND BOYS, GRAB YOUR THINGS AND LET'S GO"!!! The busdriver yelled
Chantal gave me a warm smile before leaning over to peck me on the cheek. I rolled my eyes, standing up to retrieve my belongings. "Bootcamp, here I come," I giggled, exiting the bus...
"LINE UP"!!! This buff dude screamed
"Damn yo, we CAN hear his crazy ass."
A few people around me laughed but I was dead serious. We all lined up side by side with our suitcases in front of us. I smiled from ear to ear, not really taking this s*** seriously. Why should I? The 6 men, marched in front of us, scanning each of the bodies that stood before them. Was this supposed to be intimidation? "Oh lawd," I thought to myself as this brown skinned man stopped directly in front of me. He towered my petite frame and sweat on his forehead glistened in the sun...
"AND WHY ARE YOOOUUUU SMILING"?? He shouted, flaring his nostrils
"AND WHY ARE YOOOUUUU YELLING"?? I shouted back
He leaned forward, his face nearly 2 centimeters away from mine. "Nuh uh, back up bruh," I said, backing away...
"Do you know who I am young lady"??
"Umm...Cadet Carnigee," I stated, reading his badge
"YES! SO RESPECT ME"!!
"You gotta earn it first mister."
"John, I think we have met our match. Can you escort her to DCC...she needs to be taught a lesson, already."
I laughed in his face, grabbing my bags. Is he serious?
"Let's go," another man demanded
Chantal nudged me in the side, signaling for me to just go with the flow. I gave in, following this tall, scary ass looking dude. We walked across the widespread lawn, heading towards a small brick building. "March, march...march, march, march," I said, trying to annoy this Cadet John dude. Suprisingly, he ignored me. He opened the building's door, nodding his head for me to enter..
"Air conditioner"!!
The cool air hit me like a train. It felt so good, better then the hot, June sunshine. My eyes scanned the small room. To me it seemed as though it was a lounge or something, not some damn DCC, whatever that stood for. There, in a corner, sat 3 men, playing cards. They all looked up, eyeing the two of us. Well damn, is this where they keep all of the the cute men?
"She's all yours guys," John sighed
"Haha, I am"?? I asked, biting my lower lip
"I'm gonna take her from here," the light skinned one said, throwing a handful of cards down
John nodded his head before saluting and 'marching' off. I stood there, waiting for one of these niggas to give me a command..
"Drop and gimme 50."
"Huh...drop and give you what"??
"50"!!
"Naw, Asia Jackson don't do pushups, Seargent, umm, Brown," I grinned, staring at his badge
Damn! He was too cute to be so serious. Even under all of that bulky outerwear, I could see a few things that I liked...But the nigga was mean-mugging me...
"Imma take her to the field, guys."
Field???
He grabbed me by my arm, almost dragging me. "I like it rough." He glanced at me with disgust, shooting me a nasty look...
This shall be fun...
+2 BE CONT.+
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*Now, if you've read my other 2 stories, you know that ya girl don't write "normal" stories lol...ENJOY!!*
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ewww she nastyyy! run it
okay. well are you thinking about doing another one?
OMG!
I cant believe its over!
and it was a DREAM!!!
well done fefe!
Now please start another one!
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Used To Be: IAmYoursURMine :D
Goddamn, this the second story I read where NOTHING was as it seemed!
Was good though, was good!!
wowwwwww dat was wayyy crazii FeFe it was about her bro tha whole time lmao0o0o 2 funny i didnt expect in her dream 4 Chantal 2 be preggers by him crazii anywayz ur storii was so good girl u need 2 write anotha 1 i love ur stories!!! lol
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PrinC3sz Re3c3 l0v3s C. Br3ez3 even if he is wit big 4head Rihanna lol...Chris told me i could have watever i like i told him 2 drop Rihanna and he said ok babii lol =]
WOW
wow that wqas totally unexpected...
didnt think that that was gon b hur bro...lol
me lyked it
run it
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ya gurl bri
RUN IT!!!! PEAS!!!! LOL
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BREAKFAST CLUB!!!!!!!
BC EVERYBODY EAT!!!!!!
IM SAYIN THO.
IM HUNGRY R U??
OH YES YOU DO!
ok not crazy, but HIGHLY unpredictable!
Which is good.
Cause they be shocking the hell out of me. lol
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LIVE it up.
dRINK it down.
&& if all else fails.
GET APPLE JUICE!
Proud addict of APPLE JUICE.
LoL my endings do not be that crazy Franny!!
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Five.0h.Four. 4 Life
It doesn't matter where I am...
Where I live...
What you think...
The N.O. is in me!!
*-*Felecia*-*
Wow you be coming up with these crazy ass endings. lol
That shizznick was funny as hell.
CHRIS WAS HER BROTHER!
HAHAHAHA!
Whew man you need to do another one. lol
Wait you are I forgot.
Wonder what crazy ass ending that one will have.
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fRENCHii Babi™
I always thought......that
I would finally see a shooting star
so I could make my wish
And find you...
but your already here...
So I guess I can get
my ass up from sitting in the backyard! lol
DONE!!
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Five.0h.Four. 4 Life
It doesn't matter where I am...
Where I live...
What you think...
The N.O. is in me!!
*-*Felecia*-*
are you done with the story or is there more to it
Basically, it was all a dream.
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Five.0h.Four. 4 Life
It doesn't matter where I am...
Where I live...
What you think...
The N.O. is in me!!
*-*Felecia*-*
O...........K I DONT GET IT BUT IT WAS A GOOD STORY
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I LOVE♥ ALL MY HATERZ DEY MAKE ME FEEL GREATER.CUZ I KNOW YOU GONE HATE AT SUM POINT OF TIME BUT IM HERE TO TELL YOU I LOVE YOU(NO HOMO)CUZ U A HATA
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damn that was crazy...wow...i dnt even know what to say.....RUN IT RUN IT RUN IT RUN IT RUN IT RUN IT RUN IT RUN IT RUN IT RUN IT RUN IT RUN IT RUN IT RUN IT RUN IT RUN IT RUN IT RUN IT RUN IT
that ending was weird fefe...but i liked it.
at least it wasnt a movie like call me daddy, i was so mad!! lol
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I ♥ Chris Brown
I ♥ B5
I ♥ Quincy
I ♥ Travie
I ♥ JoBros
I ♥ Everyone!!!!!!!!!
lmao like seriously she was dream bout her brother WHO DO DAT??
LOL
GREAT STORY FEFE [NOT THAT U DONT ALREADY KNO THAT] YEA BUT ANY WAY GO CHECK OUT SEX WITH A STRANGER!!!! PLEASE?
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~~~~MiiZZ~SpOnGeBoB~~~~
A.K.A ~MINY
B.K.A ~MIMI
LOVE ALL U HOES LOL :]
CAUSE SHE f***IN NASTY MIKO
L0L
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Five.0h.Four. 4 Life
It doesn't matter where I am...
Where I live...
What you think...
The N.O. is in me!!
*-*Felecia*-*
WOAH!!!!...
Part 2 Material.
lol.
Jp...But Nice ending...confusing...why would she dream about her brother like that?
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Lately I been sensin some problems
going on with us-yeah you and I...
6-6-08...hope it never ends Babe.
|Tomiko&Bilal|
GREAT STORII
im mad,y'd it have to end?
..tsk tsk tsk
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(((It's.britt.duh?)))
LOL. DANG. HAHA. I LOVED DIS STORY.
HAHAHAHAHAH. RUNZZZ!!!!!!!!
LOL. DANG. HAHA. I LOVED DIS STORY.
HAHAHAHAHAH. RUNZZZ!!!!!!!!
actually,yea i have.I just never got to finish them...lol
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Watch your thoughts;they become words.
Watch your words; they become actions.
Watch your actions;they become habits.
Watch your habits;they become character.
Watch your character;it becomes your
O.M.G. BRI, HAVE U READ ANY OF MY OTHER STORIES??
THEY WERE SOOOOOOOO MUCH BETTER
LOL
BUT THANK YOU GIRL!
THANKS 2 EVERYONE WHO READ AND COMMENTED!
MUCH LOVELIES!!
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Five.0h.Four. 4 Life
It doesn't matter where I am...
Where I live...
What you think...
The N.O. is in me!!
*-*Felecia*-*
Dang I am in TOTAL shock!
okay at first i thought that he had got Chantal pregnant
but when i read the ending it was all a dream &&
Chris was her brother
chantal is his real girlfriend
&&& she is really pregnant
wow! good job i effin loved the story!♥
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StAcKs On DeCk ThAts On My LiFe
U NeVeR WeAr ThE SaMe ThInG TwIcE
iF YoU LeAvE Wit Ya Boy ToNiGhT
U CaN HaVe WhAtEvEr U LiKe (YeA)
&& U GoN HaVe ThE BeSt SeX oF YoUr LiFe TwIcE
ThReE TiMeS FoUr TiMeS wE GoN GeT It On ToNiGhT
U CaN HaVe WhAtEvEr U Like- Trey SOngz-"Whatever u Like freestyle"
NEW READER:omg girl i LOVED this!! i thought he had actually gotten chantel preggy,but it was just a dream!!! this was the best story i have ever read girl!!!! good job good job!! *claps*
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Watch your thoughts;they become words.
Watch your words; they become actions.
Watch your actions;they become habits.
Watch your habits;they become character.
Watch your character;it becomes your
NEW READER:omg girl i LOVED this!! i thought he had actually gotten chantel preggy,but it was just a dream!!! this was the best story i have ever read girl!!!! good job good jog!! *claps*
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Watch your thoughts;they become words.
Watch your words; they become actions.
Watch your actions;they become habits.
Watch your habits;they become character.
Watch your character;it becomes your
Ugh fe
you always get me with those endings
loved it
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R E T R 0.K I D
-Snappin` necks &+ Cashin` checks♥
Lmfao XD!
great story
weird and surprising ending
you are a very very good writer
i cant wait for your next story
BRAVO BRAVO BRAVO
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i am who i am
and im proud of it
luving chris
hey i still want more lol but foreal i love it u a good writer
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*~*Philly08*~*
Got Damn!?!
That Was Raw Az Hell!?!
Good Story..I Loved It!!!
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~!*Behind Every Beautiful
Gurl Theres A DumbAzz
Guy Who Did Her Wrong
And Made Her Strong*!~
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Lol, I knew it couldn't end regularly...
Damn, it was a dream???
Chris is her brother???
Who is her baby daddy? Is it still that dude??
Damn, I'm stupified.
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"Lyfa is a unique group of people, not a group of unique people. There's no such thing."~Q
FeFe whyyyy?????
this s*** wuz fiya that endin wuz totally unexpected tho
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~!*!~JAMERiCAN MAMii~!*!~
BiSH i'M DA BOMB LiKe TiCK tIck!!!
(!-_S.A.D. KRU 2 Di W3rL_-!)
.::Call Me Mrs. Neverson::.
I'm Trey's Ride or Die!....HOENUTS 2 DI W3RL!!!!
U COPIED MY ENDING!!!
Lol JK sis dis was hella good!!
I'm proud ov u! LOL
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CHRISTOPHER
Just In Time To Save Me
Hoenut && Caper && Bubble Gum Barbie 4 life!!
Fefe Fefe Fefe hmmm smh... well
WOW!!!
now all you need to do is write a story for me!
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Justisha!!! I luv mah man!
Bubbl3 Gum Barbi3 ||BiG RED||
HoeNut_SiNNy.SiN³
Sorror Sinful Sinny
--RaViSHiNG.SWaGG³
run it!
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Done had an epiphany
Done had my arguments
Done gave up all my love for my haters
Done changed my style
Done with impressing these stupid boys
Done with it all
What else you want?
Cause I'm DONE!
And I'm living my life..gracefully
DAMN!!!!!!!!!!!
That was all types of f***ed up!!!! =]
But I liked it!
Thanks Felecia for another wild story!!!!
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I'm a star b****, I don't give a f***
Don't be surprised
when this b**** start blowin' up
Well its a little bit of us,
a whole lot of you
And we just came here to see what it do...
"Spaz"-N.E.R.D.
OOOOOOO WOW DAMN I WASNT EXPECTIN DAT AT ALL!!!!!!
DAMN FEFE U A HELL OF A GOOD WRITER.
lmao dat was funny kinda.
*claps and appluads*
Bravo Fefe Bravo.
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We can hear the Angels callin us
We can see the Sunrise before us
and when U in that thang U make my body sang
U make it say:
Wee Ooh Wee Ooh Wee
Wee Ooh Wee Ooh Wee
Wee Ooh Wee Ooh Wee
~Mrs. Officer~
DAAAAMMMMMNNNNNNN!!!!!!!!! Dats Fukked Up!!! lol
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(Lil Kid Voice)
The sea is our world
We are all sea creatures
Nd im a lil fishy
We can all live in our ENEMINEMIES (eneminies)
Nd be friends
But if u dont lyk me
Den u can jus keep swimin
(Regular)
Bytch!